Jasmine Hart

Ok, I was in a similar sitation to you. I'd had my idea for at least three years, I thought about it, I started it at the time, and I ...

Hmmm....let me see... 1) edit/rewrite novel, whichever prooves more appropriate 2)journal regularly 3)poem a day until notebook (currently empty) is full 4)story a month (ditto notebook sitaution abov

Haha. And the same to you, Nate. *wonders whether coco potatoes are potatoes filled with cocoa powder, or just giant "Coco Pops."*

Hahaha. This was brilliant! I'd omit "like" before "a crab gone dry", for the sake of the rhythm. Actually, now that I'd change that to: "Your flaky shell, A crab ...

This was really powerful. I'll try not to echo what's already been said... For some reason, I expected line two to rhyme with line four, and was surprised when it ...

I really liked this. The tone was perfect and it flowed well. I think that the rhythm is off in places. I hope you'll excuse my experimentation here, it will ...

I thought that this was really great. It flowed very well, and you exercise mastery over language.I love how you express yourself. I'd change "the preciousness we've guarded" to "the ...

Hi Melissa. Welcome! Hope you like it here. Is it just poetry you write, or do you write fiction too? What kind of poetry do you write? (I'm sure I'll ...

I agree with Suzanne. I'd try shwoing, rather than telling. Use imagery and characters instead of direct statements. Now that I've said that, I'll look at this as a piece ...

I loved the first one, which I have just read, and can't fault, and this is just as good.You handle language skillfully and the scene which you create is very ...

This was nice and concise. I'd use punctuation, and change "can'" to "can't." I think that you could go deeper with this, and make it fresher. Maybe try playing with ...

Your imagery is beautiful, and I liked the ending. I think that the second line is too long. Try reading this aloud to get a better sense of the rhythm. ...

This is beautiful.I love your imagery. I'd add punctuation. I really can't fault this, but "Like how the moon had look" doesn't make sense so I'd rephrase this. Sorry I ...

This is really cute. I'd say "all his friends" in the last line of the first stanza for the sake of the rhythm. I liked the part about thebaked crabs, ...

This is nice, and you make your point effectively. The first stanza is really great and to the point. Your rhythm goes a bit off after this stanza. I'd try ...